IELTS HOPECO: Analysing Multiple Diagrams

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The final part of learning how to write about bar charts, line charts, tables and pie charts is to look at Task 1 exercises with two or more diagrams in each. You can have the same type of diagram in one exercise, or they might be different.

Writing about multiple diagrams is almost the same as for single diagrams. Therefore, you have already studied nearly everything you need to know. However, there are several more important points that need to be noted. Study Exercise A and look at the introduction and general statement written below it.

Exercise A

Consumer preferences by media type

Yesterday, did you

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On a scale of one (very poor) to ten (very good), how good do you think the two paragraphs below are? Discuss your ideas with a classmate and decide what you like/dislike about them. If you think changes are needed, you can rewrite them.

❖ Introduction

The table compares and contrasts data on the preferences of people questioned for five different types of media. The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the nine activities favoured by 13- to 17-year-olds.

❖ General statement

In general, the TV was voted as providing the greatest experience while the Internet was the most informative and gave people the greatest sense of satisfaction, and finally the TV was what people turned on first and was the easiest to use. The majority of the f3- to 17-year-olds watched TV and the minority of them read a comic book.

The main problem here is that the two paragraphs add up to 94 words, so this is far more than the recommended 50 to 60 words. The main reasons for this are that:

two sentences have been used for each paragraph
too much information has been added
some repetition of information has also occurred

The way to avoid this is to use only one sentence for each paragraph and think about using a phrase like The two diagrams compare and contrast for the introduction and An overview of the diagrams shows that for the general statement to start each paragraph.
Writing such long paragraphs tells the examiner that you are not able to select the most important points for each paragraph. Your ability to write in a concise manner suffers as a result. Do be careful, sometimes Task 1 statements are written longer than they should be. This is done to see if you follow the same style. If you do, you will end up with an even longer paragraph but probably a lower score. Now try to write the whole essay.

❖ Body

Although many students think multiple diagrams are more difficult, it is fairly easy to see why this is not true. So far, all of the diagrams in this book have been single diagrams, and you have had to write about 100 words for each body. With multiple diagrams, you have the same number of words to write but you can use data from two or more diagrams. This means that each diagram provides some of the data you need and so offers more information to choose from. Also, you can still look for the same key points that you look for with single diagrams, with or without time periods. The final point is that you need to decide whether or not it is possible to compare and contrast between each diagram. When do you think it could be possible? Why might it not be possible?

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