IELTS HOPECO: Processes (Part 7) - Developing each stage more fully

❖ DEVELOPING EACH STAGE MORE FULLY

    As explained earlier, if each stage in the process is not developed fully, it becomes more and more difficult to write 150 words. Writing a conclusion still might not add enough words to the essay. To help with this, it is very important to make sure that a number of dif­ferent requirements are fulfilled. The first is that each piece of information flows smoothly into the next. Words known as time order phrases help link each part of the process to­gether. As you begin to practice writing processes, try to use a different time order phrase each time you move from one stage to the next. You will find that these are also used when writing cycles and flow charts.



Also, writing more fully about each stage is an important key to writing 150 words. If we take Exercise F, showing the steam distillation process used in the manufacture of euca-lyptus essential oils, you can see that there are several ways you can write about each stage.

❖ EXERCISE F

One way to write a body would be to only use the information from the diagram. For example,



There are obviously many problems with this:
 

1.         The body is far too short and only uses information taken from the diagram.

2.         Verb selection is very limited.

3.         Each stage in the process has not been developed clearly and concisely.

4.         Sentence structures are simple and badly written.

5.         The phrase vaporized water and essential oils has been copied directly from the diagram.

6.         It is very obvious that the writer does not understand the process.
 

It is essential to try and understand the process as much as possible because you can then add implied information about each stage. For example, a different approach in writ­ing this essay would be to write phrases like water is heated in an enclosed container and the steam produced by this action enters a tube.

Spend a few minutes studying the diagram again and write the whole essay by develop¬ing each stage as much as possible.